Could you please help score my SAT essay?

<p>Please help! Thank you so much :)</p>

<p>Prompt: Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?</p>

<p>I change my clothes, you change your kidneys for a new set, and our dear friend Pedro digs in his pockets for some change. Change is everywhere. It happens in you school, on your street, and even in your own home. Do those change always mean that good is about to happen? Yes and no. We can't know for sure, but some changes in our lives such as medical changes and educational changes have made our lives easier and better.</p>

<p>Imagine that the hospital you were standing in 2 minutes ago had just vanished. All of a sudden, a crowd of injured people will have nowhere to go. Medical changes are something that made our lives so much better. Now we have CAT scans, X-ray machines, MRIs, ultrasounds to help diagnose our patients. We no longer have to use the ancient method of using leeches to heal a sick person. Newest inventions such as IV drips and antibiotics can save us. Organ transplants have made us healthier and live longer. Prosthetic body parts can also replace broken limbs. Medical changes have allowed men to save the human race from injuries and diseases like the Black Plague. We surely cannot deny that medica changes have made our lives better. </p>

<p>It was once our custom to believe that a woman's duty is to bear and raise children. We once believed that education and work aren't meant for women. Women of the world, aren't you glad that his had changed? Educational changes have made not only women's lives better, bout our s too. With education, we now know more about hygiene. We no w know that dirty, contaminated water will give us nasty diseases such as cholera. For women, we can now enroll in universities, get a stable job, and no longer have to depend on someone else. Indeed, these changes have made our lives better. </p>

<p>Changes happen everywhere and to everyone. Changes that make our lives easier can certainly make our lives better, for example, medical & educational changes. Many times, these changes are beneficial, but we certainly hope that these changes don't make our lives more difficult.</p>

<p>I can’t give accurate numerical scores because I’ve forgotten the rubric, but I can critique. </p>

<p>You don’t really address the prompt. You talk about changes that make lives both easier and better, but you don’t argue WHY they make lives easier and better as opposed to easier but worse, which is what the question asked. </p>

<p>An argument along those lines could be “Some changes, while making life easier, decrease the quality of life. For example, in the movie WALL-E, robots and automated processes perform most tasks for humans, making life quite easy. However, these tasks even include leisure, so although life is effortless for humans in this universe, it is also insubstantial and meaningless.”</p>

<p>That’s a quick sketch of a thesis and first example.</p>