critics for my essay please

<p>pretty please with sugar on top =) anyone have spare time to read my college essay? any comments are appreciated. It's on me as the American Dream... but with a sort of different twist. I'll PM you.</p>

<p>thank you very very much, I need this help!</p>

<p>Id be happy to take a look at it</p>

<p>hey..ill take a look at it</p>

<p>sure...PM me</p>