Critique my Common App essay before I send it off?

Hey CC! I’ve been here a while, but I’m new to the essay board. I’m applying EA to a few schools, and as such I’m getting ready to send in my essay. It’s over the Common App prompt about challenging a belief or idea. I’d love some feedback, so if you’d be willing to read my essay, just post here and I’ll message you! Thanks in advance.

If you message me I would love to give you feedback. Where do you intend to apply if you don’t mind me asking?

I’ll take a look

pm me

I’ll have a glance :smiley:

I’d love to have some additional feedback before I send it off to some more schools!

Well, I’m old enough to perhaps give you a different perspective than the ones who responded earlier. Not that interested in tonight’s football games, so send it my way.

I’d be happy to swap with you if interested! I’ve submitted SCEA already (no plagiarism haha)