Critique my Common App Essay please!

<p>Hello! I have no clue how to write my essay, it's structure and all, but have written a draft on 'my favourite place'. </p>

<p>I'd really be grateful if you'd take some time to help me with my essay as well! Thank you :) PM me!</p>

<p>Sure, PM it over :D</p>

<p>Thank you :))</p>

<p>Sure! PM it :)</p>

<p>Yes, PM it to me.!!!</p>

<p>PM it to me!</p>

<p>I’d be happy to help you! I have extensive experience as a tutor and essay editor (including editing 30+ essays on CC), so hopefully I can be a boon to you :D</p>

<p>PM me and I’ll give you my email address so you can send it to me via email.</p>

<p>PM it to me :)</p>

<p>Hey! Thanks everyone for volunteering :slight_smile: I have decided to attempt to write another essay, less structured (I mimicked this from a help book) but still revolving around this topic! Sooooo… It would be nice if you guys critic if I’m presenting myself right with this light, how I can improve my structure and stuff :slight_smile: thank you’</p>

<p>If you require more feedback on your essays then feel free to PM me :)</p>

<p>Hey everyone! I just rewrote my essay :)) please help me!</p>

<p>Would you all be so kind to
Pick the better of the two? Thank you so much! I really appreciate jt</p>

<p>You can pm them to me!</p>

<p>Would be happy to look at it, just pm me.</p>

<p>Same thing here.</p>

<p>i will read it.</p>

<p>Hey everyone! I just redid an essay, but I did not use a prompt )’: could you please critic my essay and on top of that, please please please see if there’s anyway to link it to the prompts? Thank yoy</p>

<p>I would like to read it.</p>