Critique my Common App essay?

<p>I'm doing ED for a school and my deadline is Nov. 15. Anyone want to critique my essay to bits? :D The prompt I chose was about having an influential fictional character.</p>

<p>send it here. from your profile i know you already applied to vassar, and i’m curious at what i;m going up against. sorry, kind of creepy, you don’t have to send it if you don’t want to</p>

<p>You can PM it to me if you want. I applied ED so my common app essay is finished and submitted to all of my schools.</p>

<p>Never mind, I just reread your post. Guess I’m a little late…haha.</p>