Critique my Common App Essays??

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>I'd really appreciate some feedback on the rough draft of my CA essay to see if I'm going in the right direction. I did Topic #1. I can PM it to anyone who's willing to critique it and tell me how to best improve it.</p>

2

<p>I’ll help out</p>

3

<p>I’ll help too.</p>

4

<p>I’d love to give feedback as well.</p>

5

<p>I will as well</p>