Critique my commonapp essay

<p>I'm looking for people to critique my essay..i don't love it right now and am feeling really unsure about it. I need to keep editing and editing but would like some feedback.</p>

<p>I’ll read it! :)</p>

<p>ill read it too :D</p>

<p>Message it over</p>

<p>send through PM, I will check flow and structure</p>

<p>I’ll critique it.</p>

<p>pm me if you will</p>

<p>I’ll read it and give you feedback!! PM me :)</p>