Critique my Essay Anyone?

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>Would anyone be interested in critiquing it? It hasn't been revised yet so all constructive feedback is appreciated. =D</p>

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<p>I’ll read it !</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, jsut PM me :)</p>

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<p>of course-just send me a PM!</p>

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<p>PM me, I’ll read it!</p>

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<p>I’ll read it. PM me.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it !</p>

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<p>bumpity bump</p>

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<p>pm it to me bro</p>

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<p>happy to comment</p>

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<p>sure, just pm me (:</p>

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<p>I’ll give you some feedback :)</p>

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<p>I’m willing to read your essay and give you suggestions.</p>

<p>@ILOVEFEDERER…lol, I love Federer too :P</p>

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<p>PM me and I will read!</p>