Critique my essay! Shortening needed too!

College Essays
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<p>Anyone have spare time to critique my college essay? Harsh suggestions are welcome!</p>

<p>Prompt: Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.</p>

<p>Tell me if you want to!</p>

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<p>Just post under if you want to!</p>

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<p>I’ll read it if you want.</p>

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<p>Based on what’s posted in this thread, your essay seems to be too short.</p>