Critique my essay!

[imiracle911]

<p>I wrote two essays and i would really appreciate it if u took the time to help with them. I got critiques from some people but i am anxious to know what u think. Post here and I will PM it to u ASAP. Thanks i really appreciate it</p>

[Made_in_China]

<p>Ill take a look</p>

[wow_98]

<p>send it to me</p>

[imiracle911]

<p>sent to both of u</p>

[jcr182]

<p>ill take a look</p>

[imiracle911]

<p>sent ...............</p>

[jennee1800]

<p>send it to me too</p>

[sheng_utopia]

<p>i ll read it,</p>

[dumplings]

<p>i'll read it!</p>

[jay144]

<p>Id be happy to look it over</p>

[psychicspiesfromchina]

<p>i can read it</p>

[rExRuN467]

<p>ill take a look</p>

[camus]

<p>i'd like to read and comment!</p>

[cortigiana]

<p>I'll comment, too!</p>

[sweetmusic06]

<p>I'd be happy to take a look</p>

[sljaeger]

<p>i'd be happy to</p>

[parikhs]

<p>I'll read it...send it over</p>