Critique my essay?

<p>Please message me if you want to read it, I don't want to post it for the whole internet to see...</p>

<p>The essay I wrote is for the Common App prompt #1. I wrote it fairly quickly, but I think I missed the point of the prompt. Instead of evaluating the scenario, I described it too much. But you be the judge.</p>

<p>Thanks</p>

<p>I’ll read it</p>

<p>I will be happy to read it.</p>