Critique my statement of purpose (grad school)

<p>Would anyone care to read my statement of purpose for grad school?</p>

<p>I am applying to Master's programs. The prompt for this one is simply, "Describe your reasons for pursuing graduate study and your academic and professional interests and goals."</p>

<p>I begin with a short anecdote and relate it to my interests.</p>

<p>Thanks in advance!</p>