Critique my supplement?

<p>supplementary essay*</p>

<p>I wrote it in about an hour and am quite scared to look at it…
anyone wanna read?</p>

<p>You could pm it to me (I’m an accepted Yalie, class of 2014 and I’m all done with apps) but you’re probably better off not giving it to any 2014ers… Or anyone on CC for that matter. It’s best if you have anyone trusted at home/school who can help you out.</p>

<p>PM it to me. I already applied, so i won’t copy or anything.</p>