Critique my UC prompt 1?

College Essays
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<p>First of all HAPPY THANKSGIVING! </p>

<p>Especially to those doing their UC apps :)</p>

<p>I've just finished proofreading my UC prompt 1 but I'm not sure if I've caught all the grammatical errors. </p>

<p>Does anyone mind reading and critiquing it?</p>

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<p>I’d love to help, just PM me.</p>

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<p>PM me as well if you’d like me to read it. I need some suggestions on mine also if you dont mind :)</p>

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<p>Thanks toan!</p>

<p>Anyone else please?</p>

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<p>I can mate</p>

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<p>I’d be happy to!</p>

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<p>i’d be happy to :)</p>

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<p>I’m really sorry, but I want people who’re in college or are nearly done with their application. I hope I haven’t offended you.</p>

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<p>I’ve finished both my UC prompts (I know so late DDD: )
Can anyone just give me a quick impression please??</p>

<p>I know I’m asking for so much but only HS students who’ve finished their essays, college students or graduates. </p>

<p>Thank you</p>