Critique my "Why BU" essay?

<p>I know this is late, but if someone would be willing to critique my BU supplement it would be much appreciated! What I'm worried about is that I come off sounding self-centered; I really tried to answer the question of why it would be a good fit for me personally but I feel like I ended up sounding really egotistical and self-absorbed if that makes any sense. Anyways if you're up to read and criticize it I'll PM it to you! Thanks a bunch! :)</p>

<p>Hi! I’m a BU alum and I’d be happy to take a look!</p>

<p>sure send it over </p>