critique needed for yale essay

<p>the deadline is less than ten hours away!!
I'm still finishing my essay.. its about my dad.
would anyone be willing to read and critique my essay?
post a reply or just pm me then i'll pm u back w/ the essay.
id really appreciate it.</p>

<p>i'll read it! wanna read mine?</p>

<p>Pm me. I'll try to help w/ in 5 hours.</p>

<p>mine is partly abt my dad too- do you want to interchange- mine isn't turning out nicely and i really need some comments and criticism.</p>

<p>pm me! Happy to help asap</p>

<p>Wanna swap essays? I"m in dire need too (Yale as well)</p>

<p>Pm Me Please!!</p>

<p>thanks everyone for offer. i'll pm it out as soon as i finish this--hopefully soon!</p>

<p>pm me and i'll let you know</p>

<p>I'm writing about my dad too! But I'm not applying to Yale... I'll take a look at it if you would like.</p>