Critique of my common application essay

[Malaysian]

<p>Please read this essay and pls give me some feedbacks, comments or criticisms. Thank you.</p>

[Aspen_D]

<p>sure thing</p>

[Malaysian]

<p>Pm or email me ur essay and i think you could help comment on mine tooo..</p>

[qwilde]

<p>Sure, but it may take a little while because I'm also critiquing someone else's.</p>

[movieburner125]

<p>i'll read it</p>

<p>PM me</p>

[thegreatjaadoo]

<p>i'll read it</p>

[kcajgnaw]

<p>i'll read it</p>

[ganiyen]

<p>I'll read it. pm me.</p>

[chriscap]

<p>sure i'll read it!</p>

[anurodh]

<p>i'll do it
just pm me</p>

[kinly07]

<p>you can pm me too</p>

[etti]

<p>ill read it</p>

[Grain]

<p>I'll read it too, if you want. PM me.</p>