Critique on ACT Essay?

<p>I am practicing for the upcoming ACT exam and was wondering if anyone would be willing to read/critique my essay? I definitely don't want to grade mine as I'll be too subjective. Thanks!</p>

<p>PROMPT:
In some states, legislators have debated whether teenagers should be required to maintain a "C" grade average in school before receiving a driver's license. Some people think this would be a good policy because having passing grades shows that students are responsible enough to be good drivers. Other people think such a policy would not be appropriate because they see no relationship between grades in school and driving skills. In your opinion, should teenagers be required to maintain a "C" average in school before receiving a driver's license?</p>

<p>In your essay, take a position on this question. YOU may write about either one of the two points of view given, or you may present a different point of view on this question. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.</p>

<p>ESSAY:
It's that dreaded time of year again when cycle report cards are out. Some students are satisfied with their grades while others may be wallowing in their sub-par marks. Either way, a driver's license should not be dependent on an individual's grades due to various factors such as family issues, level of courses taken and the fact that good grades simply does not equate with good drivers.</p>

<p>As of now, there are numerous advanced courses that an individual can take in high school. The best part is that now students are starting to take more advanced courses. However, though a student may take a an advanced course does not mean that he or she will be successful in the class. Even though he or she may be a ambitious student, the course load or topic of an advanced class may prove to be too difficult for that student. Just because a student may be making a D or less only means that the student needs a less rigorous course or increased tutoring, not a revocation of a driver's license.</p>

<p>Moreover, though some students may find getting a driver's license as a path to freedom, some students need a driver's license as a necessity. In some households there may be no one to get the groceries or even pick up the children due to the fact that no one in the household can drive. In order to resolve such a problem, a driver's license in an absolute necessity. In Texas, an individual can obtain a license as young as 15 years through a hardship license program. This program is reserved for special students in which they will be the sole driver of their household either because their parents are disabled or various other reasons that prevent a guardian from obtaining a license. In this case, the individual should not be reliant on the fact that obtaining a less than C average should destroy his or her chance from helping his or her family.</p>

<p>Even though some may say that having good grades equates good driving, that it not always true. A highly intelligent student is just as capable of speeding on the freeway or talking on the phone while driving. The reason is because every teen sometimes feels as if they have too much freedom and will do things aren't appropriate while driving. In addition, even though a student may have grades that are unworthy of a celebration, it is not always their fault. That individual could be experiencing traumatic issues at home and thus cannot concentrate on his or her schoolwork. With just a little encouragement or removing of the main issue, he or she will be good as new!</p>

<p>In conclusion, administering driver licenses based on whether a student has a C average or higher is inappropriate. A student may be taking higher courses or experiencing family issues at home which could lead to grades that are low. As Zigler Reison says "Never judge a book by its cover".</p>

<p>Please be as HARSH as you can as I really do want to improve. Thanks in advance! :)</p>

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