Deadline tomorrow!! Please read my essay!!!!

[ishkabob]

<p>Hi
I have to submit this essay tomorrow online! So will someone please critique me? comment here and i'll pm you.</p>

<p>Thanks in advance!</p>

[letitsnow]

<p>i can help</p>

[thegreatjaadoo]

<p>i can help</p>

[ishkabob]

<p>all sent! thanks soo much guys!</p>