Desperate! Help Needed

<p>Hey guys so I sat down today to write my essay beginning at 12:00 a.m. and ended at 9:00 pm with not much to show for it except a really shoddy rough essay. To give some background, I'm pretty poor and live in a small apartment and some of my ideas were the following:</p>

<p>1.) Grandfather was a farmer in India with no education, but still had key values from his life’s work (discipline, punctuality, etc) and experiences and passed on to me which taught me to strive for the best [include an anecdote--> maybe something trivial; i usually make omelets with him every weekend and i can say that he taught me if you want something done, do it yourself] discipline, punctuality, etc
2.)Father has had history of psychological difficulties (I have a lot of crazy experiences regarding this but idk if I should use it because they might think I might not have a stable mental health) and my mother has persevered throughout while caring for me which made me idolize my mother and her bravery + led to my commitment to not become like my father who hasn’t taken charge as man of the family
3.)Seeing a live surgery for the first time this summer (a cholecystectomy to be exact) and talking about how it further bent my inclination towards medicine</p>

<p>As for my essay I have written, if you guys could please read it that would be great! Tell me if you want it PM'ed.</p>

<p>^bump please read!</p>

<p>Hi,</p>

<p>I will read it if you would like, PM it so i can offer you my thoughts and suggestions.</p>