<p>I am a transfer student applying for admission for fall admission to various schools. I have written an essay about my cancer which I underwent treatment for throughout high school. I also, however, am including my cancer in my "why i want to transfer" essay because obviously the cancer played a large role in my high school career and why I want to transfer. (I am through treatment now and am able to apply further away from my clinic. This being a major reason for my transfer because I am seeking to broaden my horizons.) I was wondering if it was appropriate to write my essay on the topic of my cancer and coping with it throughout high school and also including it in my "why I want to transfer essay" in the context of me being cured and allowed to finally move and choose a school I see fit for all my academic endeavors. I dont want to come off as repetitive in my essays nor do I want to come off as milking my cancer and being melodramatic about the topic by including it twice.</p>
<p>hm... I don't know much as the whole transfer student admissions process, but to me it does kind of seem like you are "milking [your] cancer and being melodramatic about the topic by including it twice."</p>
<p>By "including" it in your "why I want to transfer" essay, do you mean you focused on it or just mentioned it as a side note?</p>
<p>It sounds like your cure makes it possible to transfer, but is not, apparently, in itself a reason to transfer.</p>
<p>I am removing the cancer from my "why I am transferring essay." Since it makes me possible for a transfer, do you think I should note it as an addendum after my essay?</p>
<p>If you are submitting a transfer application, the reader imo assumes that it is indeed possible for you to transfer. At first blush, then, it seems unnecessary to specifically so state. Do you disagree with this line of thinking?</p>
<p>I think that it's unbelievable that this process has become so cynical that describing one's cancer and treatment is seen as "milking it" or somehow manipulative. Go ahead and describe your cancer, your treatment, how it impacted you in high school and now. Don't overthink it or care if someone believes that you are using it as a "hook." Melodramatic?! Last I heard, cancer was life-threatening.....Congratulations on getting through it and on to a place where you can think about things like transfering.</p>
<p>I am surprised that you have to write a general essay for transfer. I was under the impression that the essay required for transfer students is usually along the lines of why you want to transfer (and your citing your cancer as a reason would be more than appropriate in this essay). What school requires a first-year type common essay for transfer?</p>