Dire need of another opinion

College Essays
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<p>Can anyone who has extra time on their hands give me an opinion of my college essay?? It's my first and I need a stranger to tell me if I'm going in the right direction because I'm not sure</p>

2

<p>I can read it!</p>

3

<p>I can read it.</p>

4

<p>I emailed y’all!</p>