<p>For this section in the UC applications, I have a limit of 240 characters to explain why I want to be in EOP. This is what I thought up of (though it is over the limit) and I want to know if I'm on the right track. </p>
<p>"I am a dependent student from a low-income family. The sheer price of University tuition and many other factors is highly overwhelming and without the EOP program, I cannot afford it all even with an in-campus job. EOP will be highly beneficial for me and my pursuit for a successful future ahead of me."</p>
<p>Does this sound right?
Please give opinions and suggestions. Thank you!</p>
<p>What is the exact prompt for that? Sorry for my ignorance but is this a program that gives extra support services to 1st gen? Or is it helping with costs in addition to usual financial aid?</p>
<p>The statement you made is extremely generic that could be made by anyone. The last sentence is particularly bland’ you may as well omit that if you are pressed for space. Why ‘and many other factors’? what does that mean?</p>
<p>Depending on the prompt, perhaps you could say how you in particular would benefit?</p>