lol jk
about a week ago, I posted my risky harvard essay and I think there was a general consesus that I should write about my experience at the convent. Let me know of what u think of my essay so far please! Im sort of stuck!
If prior to last year, anyone asked me if I would ever consider entering the convent, I would have laughed in their face and gave them an overly sarcastic reply, probably something to the effect of, yup, and the year after, Im going to be canonized a saint. But now, if asked that very same question, I would reply with an earnest: Im seriously considering it.
What could possibly make a fun loving, boy-crazy, career-driven diva aspire to take a vow of chastity, poverty and obedience? Well, lots of things.
<p>I take it the title was a poor joke, nuff said. </p>
<p>This, otoh, sounds interesting:
"What could possibly make a fun loving, boy-crazy, career-driven diva aspire to take a vow of chastity, poverty and obedience? Well, lots of things."</p>
<p>What grammar problems? essays don't have to be "grammar-tized".
freaking grammar nazis. it's a PERSONAL excerpt of your life, not an essay you write for english class.</p>
<p>...anyway, i wonder if the OP got accepted to Harvard</p>
<p>If the OP didn't use the kind of inappropriate, offensive humor in her essay that she used in her title here, then I would imagine that her essay would have boosted her chances.</p>
<p>Harvard is, after all, the place where in the 1980s, a student became a Buddhist nun and then wrote her senior thesis about it. Afterward, she turned that thesis into a book.</p>
<p>"Fresh from a UNESCO-funded summer of writing at the Civitella Ranieri Foundation in Umbria, Faith Adiele '86 sits in her office at the University of Pittsburgh. ... The office is a happy mixture of the typical English professor's lair, filled with books and papers, and an eclectic gallery, decorated with Asian and African wall hangings and knickknacks. </p>
<p>The setting is a far cry from the unadorned room at a temple deep in an Asian forest where, 20 years ago, Adiele changed her life by temporarily joining a Buddhist religious order. That bare room and her once clean-shaven head are among the memorable images in her new book, Meeting Faith: The Forest Journals of a Black Buddhist Nun. The narrative's publication is the latest step in Adiele's long journey from Western farm girl to Harvard student to nun in Thailand to award-winning writer and English professor in Pennsylvania. Along the way, she also arrived at a greater sense of self-awareness, a renewed commitment to social activism, and, at last, a sense of being right where she belongs..."
From Harvard Magazine: <a href="http://www.harvardmagazine.com/on-line/110413.html%5B/url%5D">http://www.harvardmagazine.com/on-line/110413.html</a></p>
<p>sararah, perhaps you don't realize that eloquence is favored by those of us who read college essays: A carefully composed, grammatically correct essay invites my interest in what the writer has to say; carelessness (or ignorance of the conventions) is definitely a turnoff.</p>
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Bald and browless like many Buddhist nuns, she was required to shave off the trappings of vanity she spent two months in a forest temple, learning the intricacies of purposeful, mindful, seemingly simple living. She rose at 3:30 each morning, donned a heavy, full-length white robe, spent long hours in silent sitting and walking meditation sessions, and got by on a single daily meal of rice and vegetables.
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Huuuuuuge change of life after going to Harvard.</p>
<p>nah I didn't really think that, celloguy. so you read college essays as an admissions officer? I mean, I know you have to make it readable, but purposely changing it to make the tone proper detracts from the "personal essay" imo.</p>
<p>Do you see any grammatical errors with
"What could possibly make a fun loving, boy-crazy, career-driven diva aspire to take a vow of chastity, poverty and obedience? Well, lots of things."</p>
<p>? maybe a comma after poverty, but that's about it . .</p>
<p>lol, students should make grammatical errors on purpose to show their individuality and their nonconformance to society's norms and that they can think for themselves!</p>