Does progress result only from struggle and conflict? (Grade my Essay)

<p>Frederick Douglass once said, “If there is no struggle, there is no progress. This struggle may be a moral one, or it may be a physical one, and it may be both moral and physical, but it must be a struggle.” He was right. Progress is something that must be fought for; without conflict, progress simply does not occur.</p>

<p>Assignment: Does progress result only from struggle and conflict? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Every victory sing a saga of a struggle.The life of man is struggle on the earth.Without a struggle we get nowhere.Progress and victory is followed only by courageous efforts. It is indeed the human tendency that makes us insouciant of the things we get without any efforts. A man who wishes to have progress without struggle, must be reminded that there can be no rain without thunder and lightning or no crops without plowing up the ground.</p>

<p>The history has been a keen observer of such struggles which resulted in a triumph. It was on December 1,1955, when the 42 years old African American women named Rosa Parks ignited the quest for freedom and equality among the black. She worked as a seamstress and boarded the Montgomery City bus to go home from work. She sat near the middle of the bus, just behind the 10 seats reserved for whites. Soon all of the seats in the bus were filled. When a white man entered the bus, the driver insisted that all four blacks sitting just behind the white section give up their seats so that the man could sit there. Mrs. Parks refused saying, "No". She was arrested and convicted of violating the laws of segregation. A group named the Montgomery Improvement Association, composed of local activists and ministers, organized a boycott of the Montgomery bus system. As their leader, they chose a young Baptist minister who was new to Montgomery: Martin Luther King, Jr. was sparked by Mrs. Parks’ action. The boycott lasted 381 days, into December 1956 when the U.S. Supreme Court ruled that the segregation law was unconstitutional and the Montgomery buses were integrated. The Montgomery Bus Boycott was the beginning of a revolutionary era of non-violent mass protests in support of civil rights in the United States. It took someone with the courage and character of Rosa Parks to start the struggle which eventually led into victory.</p>

<p>Sometimes struggle are exactly what we need in our life. One day a was sitting in his garden when he observed a small cocoon of a butterfly. He saw the butterfly inside the cocoon struggling to get out through a small opening and squeezing its body through the hole. The man decided to help the butterfly. He took a pair of scissors and chopped off the cocoon, setting out the butterfly free. He waited to see the beautiful wings sprawling out of the and wonderful flight to be taken by it. However to his horror it never happened. The butterfly was now crippled for its entire life. What the man in his kindness and haste did not understand the restricting cocoon and the struggle required by the butterfly to get through the opening was a way of forcing the fluid from the body into the wings so that it would be ready for flight once that was achieved. Going through life with no obstacles would cripple us.We will not be as strong as we could have been and we would never fly.</p>

<p>Strength and growth come only through continuous effort and struggle.The most beautiful people we have known are those who have known defeat, known suffering, known struggle, known loss, and have found their way out of those depths. The battle of life is, in most cases, fought uphill; and to win it without a struggle were perhaps to win it without honor. If there were no difficulties there would be no success; if there were nothing to struggle for, there would be nothing to be achieved.</p>

<p>Please neglect my mistakes in paragraph 1 of the essay- It should be sings instead of “sing” and “Progress and victory are followed only by courageous efforts” not “Progress and victory is followed only by courageous efforts”</p>

<p>There are a few grammar mistakes that I’m sure came from retyping into the post, so make sure you read it over and over. It’s strongly written and follows the prompt, but I’m worried that this doesn’t show the admissions officer anything about you. Maybe you should replace one of the examples with a time you struggled, or took the easy way out and learned from it. </p>

<p>This is an SAT essay, I’m assuming, not a college admissions essay, so I wouldn’t follow the advice above if it is an SAT essay. Those shouldn’t be about you.</p>

<p>If it’s an SAT essay, than @bodangles is right. Sorry, I didn’t take that into consideration. </p>

<p>If this is an SAT essay, you should watch this video: <a href=“Has Teen Unlocked the Secret to a Better SAT Score? - ABC News”>http://abcnews.go.com/GMA/ConsumerNews/teen-student-finds-longer-sat-essay-equals-score/story?id=12061494&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p&gt;

<p>thank u for your feedback…And yes it is a SAT essay…can you please tell me how much will i score in this out of 12?
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<p>Your essay is 589 words, so according to Dr. Perelman of MIT, you would get a top score:
<a href=“SAT Essay Test Rewards Length and Ignores Errors - The New York Times”>http://www.nytimes.com/2005/05/04/education/04education.html&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p&gt;

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<p>Thank u @gibby for devoting so much time for my essay… Your suggestions were of gr8 help…thanku</p>

<p>I feel like you wouldn’t be able to write that much in the actual 25 minute time frame…</p>

<p>Haha, this is an SAT essay xD I’m an eighth grader and I took it this January for the NUMATS program.</p>