<p>I could really use some good opinions/ critiques</p>
<p>I did the quote: “Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat. But rather achievement can be all the more satisfying because of the obstacles surmounted.” </p>
<p>Anyone?</p>
<p>Send it to me, I'll read it.</p>
<p>I'll read it, too. I responded to the same prompt.</p>
<p>Send it to me, I ll give my comments. I wrote the same essay as a transfer and I got in.</p>
<p>I will read :)</p>
<p>Dispaice, if one can give a compelling, true story that resonates with that prompt, I think it's the strongest. COngrats on your acceptacne as an xfer--that's quite a feat!
My 'hook' (I hope), or one of them, will lie in my "overcoming of obstacles".</p>
<p>^everyone has obstacles in their lives though, so I don't know how that is much of a hook.</p>
<p>Thats fine Froghorn, since in that case their is a specimen to dissect, then the question arises " what are we loking for". Since your mental skills and talent is what is being sought you must be careful to adequately expose them.</p>
<p>My approach was analytical in the sense that I went back to the basics; what do we mean when we say "difficulties in life"?, Maybe their is no such thing, maybe that is infact life and perhaps in the extreme it might be a necessity in the same way one would consider good practice a necessity when preparing for a marathon race.</p>
<p>Their are several ways of approaching the issue, whichever way you choose, try to remain original.</p>
<p>Best of luck.</p>
<p>I wouldn't mind having a look at it .. not applying to Amherst ..</p>
<p>We all have obstacles, some greater than others. Thanks for the advice Dispiace; I believe my essay is true both to the quote and to me, thus by the nature of the latter, individual. I'm not worried about it.</p>
<p>i'll read it...im doing the science one</p>
<p>I'll read it.
I'm doing the Kennedy quote.</p>
<p>i'll read it too, i'm doing the one about stereotypes.</p>
<p>would anyone care to read my essay and strongly criticize me? I promise I'll read yours and be as tough as I can ;)</p>
<p>Sure Daniel (mine is sent in already) but I'll be happy to look at yours.</p>
<p>i just sent mine in with that topic
pm me ill read</p>
<p>i did the science one. i'll read yours and give you feedback.</p>
<p>Sure. I already did mine on the 3rd one on the list I believe. :-)</p>
<p>Will anyone read mine and be harsh about it? I just had it looked at for grammar and diction by another user in the college essays thread, but I'd love to have someone analyze how well it answers the prompt.</p>
<p>I'm doing the difficulty quote as well, no thanks to Williams and their deferrments-that-are-really-rejections (I mean really, only 15 to 20 deferred kids out of 7000 regular applicants?! sheesh.)</p>
<p>I just can't wait until it's all over.</p>
<p>God bless Dartmouth for not having a supplemental.</p>
<p>If you haven't already sent it in and are still awake, I'd be happy to read it. I am a harsh critic.....</p>
<p>if you havent sent it in yet...ill read it as well</p>