<p>Jamimom, I do wish that she had had the high SAT score for the initial ED read, just bad luck that she was horribly sick for the November test date...you have a good memory. I'm still bemused that the difference between a 1480 and a 1580 can be significant but as the results rolled in, it really seemed as if there was a true "bump" in odds around 1540. And you're right, her app was submitted toward the end of the cycle when they were swamped. And the app as a whole wasn't focused on any "What can you do for us?" facet. However, her French horn would have been insignficant at Yale, where the orchestra is dominated by Music majors and/or graduate students; her ballet recognition would have been a reflection on Yale via New Haven Ballet, literally across the street. So to that degree, neither would have been a strong hook for Yale.</p>
<p>Of course--and I don't recall how public I was this at the time--even then <em>I</em> was dithering as to what I thought the best fit for her was. Hard to turn down Yale if offered but Smith had been just so impressive and the Yale administrator who took us to lunch and answered questions about Yale paused when she asked what other schools D was interested in and said that some close relative (daughter?) had gone to Smith and it was a very very good school...not the "Oh, it's a fine back-up" response I would have expected her to say. Given how D is doing at Smith and how happy she is, it may be just as well that that cup passed her by...all of us are pretty much against choosing schools on the basis of "prestige" but that would have been a hard test of principle.</p>
<p>Classicist, "off-tones" were things that were, well, superficial. Like the architecture and the inverted fountain, the input she got from an ex-spouse-of-friend administrator which, while glowing, may have conveyed a "insider sense of entitlement" that rankled, etc.</p>
<p>My D's ballet essay wasn't a technical piece but a "why she loved pas de deux class" and was filled with sensory detail and subjective reaction...LOL, I remember the negative about "guy sweat soaking my leotard as I slide down from my partner's shoulders."</p>
<p>While I think they want an essay that is well-written, I think the emphasis is on knowing our as a person. I've mostly gotten out of the essay reviewing business here on CC--too little reward for too much time--but once you get past the essays that have a bad attitude or are illiterate, one of the next biggest problems imo are those that are stilted, formal, and detached. Too "English class writerly" and therfore fake.
One of my favorites was a quirky one by Chasgoose (now at Yale) about his relationshipe with Gertrude Stein.</p>
<p>I tend to endorse your strategy of, if you are often seen as intellectual/cereberal, showing off a different side as well...the old "well-rounded" thing. But what do I know in terms of how it actually works?</p>