<p>Hello, i am planning on applying to U Penn ED, and i have been struggling to write essays on the topics, any help would be appreciated. I did manage to complete one essay for the commonapp, if anyone is willing to read it i will PM with the essay. Thanks in anticipation!</p>
<p>I can try to help you out :)</p>
<p>Thanks for the help!</p>
<p>Any help would be greatly appreciated, tell me if you will be willing to critique my essay. I will PM the essay.</p>
<p>I am willing to help</p>
<p>I can’t PM back because I don’t have enough posts. You should make it more clear what you mean by “care about school.” The first sentence led me to believe that you were talking about bullying; it took me a while to realize you were talking about caring about scholarship.</p>
<p>bluetomato,
Thanks again for volunteering to help, yeah you’re right, i just cant seem to figure out how to specify and still keep under the 1000 characters mark. I think i will have to get rid of a sentence somewhere but I feel that each one is critical for either meaning or coherency</p>
<p>That’s true. Overall it’s good and because it’s only a 1000char I don’t think you need to worry too much about it. I enjoy reading essays and I’d be willing to help you out if you have any other essays :)</p>
<p>Thanks, when i finally manage to finish my next one I will be sure to post it!</p>
<p>I’ll check it out.</p>
<p>I can help out too if you want. I’m interested in journalism so I might provide new input</p>
<p>I sent the essay to both of you, thanks for volunteering, much appreciated!</p>
<p>I can help you, if you want :)</p>
<p>Of course! Thanks!</p>
<p>Sure thing ok help… Just got done with all mine :)</p>