Emergency...Common app.. essay critique

<p>I realize this may not be the best place to ask for feedback on my Common app. essay but the folks in the essay forum have been quite unresponsive.</p>

<p>So is anyone (preferably folks who got in ED) willing to critique my essay? I'm kinda desperate.</p>

<p>i’ll read it…i’m not ED, but I already submitted my app.
I can send you mine if it would make you feel better.</p>