<p>Could someone please critique my essay and give me some help with it? </p>
<p>Thanks</p>
<p>It is an accomplishment/experience/risk essay. My topic deals with an experience. I have a pretty much finished version done, but would like some people to discuss improving it with me.</p>
<p>Bump</p>
<p>Sorry to seem pushy, but I will be applying soon.</p>