essay critique, please

College Essays
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<p>Long time lurker, first time poster. Thought I'd humbly request some essay critique from the CC community before things get crazy in the fall.</p>

<p>A few words on the essay - It wasn't written with college admissions in mind. Really, it was just a bit of "creative writing". But, I thought I might see if it fits the criteria, and then I could have the "personal" essay out of the way. My only reservation is that it might not have the whole "life lesson" thing...though it has a little of that I guess. In short, I need some outside perspective.</p>

<p>Anyone care to take a look?</p>

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<p>Sure. I can take a look at it and critique if u want. Pm it over. </p>

<p>~Cheers, James</p>

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<p>Hmm, maybe I should have gone with a catchier title. Something like " after you read this essay you will shed tears and jump for joy, simultaneously".</p>

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<p>I will read it. pm me</p>

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<p>i will read it too…just pm me</p>

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<p>ill critique it for you too. pm it to me</p>

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<p>i’ll read it!</p>