Essay Critique

[lettherebewords]

<p>Howdy! I've been having some trouble with my supplement essay. I don't know. I just feel like there's something...missing to truly capture the admission officer's attention. It's fairly short, so if you wouldn't mind reading through and giving me feed-back (don't be scared to be a bit harsh on me, I really need the help) , that would be excellent. Just reply below and I'll PM you. Thanks in advance!</p>