<p>can someone brutally critique my common app essay? I don't know how well developed it is and if the topic is right. I already submitted it but it is really personal so I would like to know what others think about it. Also, if it matters, Im applying to all ivy leagues and other top schools.</p>
<p>Ok send it to me I’ll read it</p>
<p>i can look it over if you want a second opinion</p>
<p>I could read it if you’d like</p>
<p>I wouldn’t mind reading it either</p>
<p>I couldn’t PM you back because the site would not let me since I’m a new member but…
I really enjoyed reading your essay 
I think the tone works. I especially like how you built suspense at the beginning of your essay by not immediately letting your reader know you had a stuttering problem. </p>
<p>One minor comment though, and it’s up to you if you want to make the change, after “As I entered high school I realized that I had succumbed to the power of my problem.” you could add something that makes a better transition to the next sentence .</p>
<p>Good luck on your applications & I hope you get into the schools you want :)</p>