Essay Edit, down to the wire!

<p>Hey, its basically the title, I have written my essay for Columbia (common app reworked), and there something that just doesn't feel right about it somehow...any suggestions would be much appreciated. Just send a PM and I'll send it right over. Thank you.</p>

<p>hey ill help you out</p>

<p>yea pm me ill check it out also if u want</p>