<p>Hi, would anybody be willing to read this practice essay I wrote and gauge what score 2-12 it would get? Any advice on how to improve would be awesome. Thanks!</p>
<p>Do we need other people in order to understand ourselves?</p>
<p>Would someone growing up alone on the mountainside understand themselves as well as a person in modern society, surrounded by other people? Absolutely not. Physical needs set aside, we need those around us to become good people, and to understand our own selves. Teachers, mentors, and friends are the people we are closest to, and they are the ones who help us understand ourselves.</p>
<p>Teachres and mentors are significant for us because we respect them, due to their experience and other skills. Teachers help us understand ourselvesby telling us what we do wellwhat sets us apart from othersand also the things that we need to improve. Without someone as erudite as a teacher, we would lose much insight into our lives. One teacher I greatly benefit from is my martial arts instructor, Mr. Morris. In addition to helping me perfect a reverse-turning kick, he teaches his students lessons about life, and about ourselves.</p>
<p>We also benefit from spending time with peers, not ju stpeople we look up to. Observing our friends and classmates provides us with enlightening information about our own selveswe can compare ourself to them and see what qualities we share, because it is sometimes difficult to judge ourselves without being able to draw parallels to others. For example, when a new student arrives at school, its easy to tell who around me is kind, because those people take the time to go up to the new wtudent and introduce themself. It is difficult to learn such values without observing others. If I notice that I have a natural tendency to be friendly to a newcomer, observing others actions tells me how I compare to themam I as benevolent as they are? More so?</p>
<p>Without the company of our friends and the guidance of our teachers, we would not be able to understand ourselves. People we spend the most time with can be vital sources of information, both directly and indirectlythey can tell us about what they observe about us, or we can draw our own conclusions by juxtapositioning ourself next to our peers. A person growing up alone would definitely be at a disadvantage as for self-comprehension.</p>