Essay for Common app, please help =)

<p>Hey, I was wondering if anyone was willing to critique my essay for the "choose your own topic" theme on the common application? If so, please leave a message, and I will PM you. Thanks!</p>

<p>sure just pm me =]</p>

<p>i'll read it</p>

<p>PM me</p>

<p>pm me and I'll read it</p>

<p>aright PM to me ill read it</p>

<p>i'll check it out, pm</p>