Essay help and criticism greatly appreciated!

<p>Hey guys, Texas resident here. I'm working on my applications to both UT at Austin and Texas A&M at College Station, and I've just finished the two required essays.</p>

<p>Now, I plan on doing a third optional essay, but I want to perfect the required essays first. I'm looking for help on anything from spelling and grammar, to actual detail. </p>

<p>My overall goal with my essays, as everyone else, is to stand out and reveal my uniqueness from other applicants, and I'm hoping that my essays do just that. </p>

<p>I appreciate the help, just let me know if you're willing and I'll PM you my essays. Note, I'm slightly paranoid about sending these to just anyone, so if I feel uncomfortable sending them to you for whatever reason, don't take it personally. I'm just...protective ~.~</p>

<p>Okay, well since apparently being more careful than others about my essays is frowned upon, I’ll send them to anyone willing to give them some time. Thanks again.</p>