<p>I hope someone can help me. I have no idea how to score my essays, and would like to know roughly what level I'm at. Normally I like to have a few hours to think and write several drafts and revise and wait and go over it again, and so on. Not possible with only 25 minutes! So if I could get some honest feedback I'd appreciate it. </p>
<p>The question was this:
Are people motivated to achieve by personal satisfaction rather than by money or fame? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>My essay:
Ulitimatly, it is the desire for satisfaction which motivates people to achieve. Satisfaciton is not one set thing, however; money or fame may well be enough satisfaction for many people. Money can be exchanged for other things, and fame can be an index of success. </p>
<p>In psychology, money is said to be a secondary reinforcer. The coins alone are of little value to someone, their value stems form knowing what can be bought with them. If someone's highest satisfaction would coume from living in a beatiful house, that person would probably try to achieve that by earning enough to buy that dream home. In other words, he or she would be motivated by money.</p>
<pre><code> Being famous is to be recognized and known. Some people yearn for it, others cringe at the mere thought. For a singer, haivng strangers know her could be froof that what gave her the most personal satisfaction-singing- was appreciated by others. That, the need for approval, is a strong motivator indeed! For others, such as reality show participants, being famous could mean being important, being unique and being worth something- all satisfying things.
Although satisfaction can take many shapes, it can be hard to gain without some means. Money is a way of accessing satisfying things, and to some extent, so is fame.
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