<p>hello guys,
i've written my essay about my family background and our financial as well as personal struggles. now, it's occurred to me that this is probably a VERY CLICHE TOPIC, however true. but ahhh, i do like it somewhat. any advice? anyone willing to edit it and be BRUTALLY HONEST? i spent this whole day trying to figure out what to do to make it better and have gotten nowhere. somebody save me. please.</p>
<p>You should get more than one person to edit it, which I'm sure you know, but you can start with me.</p>