Essay Help

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>I chose the "where do you feel most content?" prompt. I began the essay by writing about a typical day in my volunteering experience (I volunteer at a school for children with mental impairments and communications disabilities). I then talked about how my interest in neuroscience relates to this. I talked about a summer course I took with CTY (the Center for Talented Youth), doctor shadowing, and even an EMT course I am taking. I didn't list it like a resume, though. I explained how the EMT course will help me pursue a medical profession, wherein I can study neuroscience and help the children. When I received feedback from others, I was told that I should focus more on the volunteering rather than talking about neuroscience because the rest of the application will show my interest in neuroscience. </p>

<p>Do you have any ideas?</p>

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<p>I agree with the others and really think you should focus on the volunteering aspect. You really want to let the admissions officer know why you’re so content there and how it has influenced you directly. Focus on your tasks there and some of the kids/adults you’ve met and they’re influence on you as well. The EMT course really takes away from the idea of the prompt.</p>

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<p>First, make sure you’re answering the question. Are you, throughout your essay, telling/showing us where you are most content (and by way of that telling us why, and giving us insight about yourself)?</p>

<p>If you are, you’re good to go. However, if your focus on neuroscience over volunteering detracts from the place you are most content (and why and what this tell us about you as a person and candidate), then yes you should change it a little.</p>