Essay Help???

So I need someone to read/ comment on my college essay, it is still a draft, but it has to be finished by tonight and I need input! Please feel free to be 100% honest, I won’t take offense!

I was trying to talk about my internship and how it affects me as a person and my vision for the future, while also giving my self a narrative voice (do you know what I mean?).

If you’re interested in reading it, reply and I’ll send it to you in PM!

Sure