<p>Hi,</p>
<p>I need help with revising my prompt on the common app. I was deferred from my ED school(wash u.) and I don't think the essay went very well.</p>
<p>I'll need it revised or if its really bad, write a new one for other schools(cmu, chicago, nyu). My prompt was on a comparsion between the can in Tom and Jerry and me.</p>
<p>Many thanks in advance.. just reply or post email and I'll send my prompt soon. I am not a very good writer so I'm too embarassed to post it publicly. :(</p>
<p>bump bump </p>
<p>yea</p>
<p>i guess i'll just post it</p>
<p>The is the common app one
i'm a bad writer so fire away</p>
<p>A splendid, cloudless September day urged me to savor the last few days of summer outdoors. Instead, I was to baby-sit my vexatious cousin. I began channel surfing TV programs after getting my cousin to sleep. Some music grabbed my attention as I flipped through the channels; it was the Circus Parade theme song from the brilliant cartoon, Tom and Jerry. I stayed tuned to Cartoon Networks broadcast of classic episodes anticipating eagerly to revive my childhood memories. As Thomas the cat pursues his archrival, Jerry, I fell asleep. I began to see many resemblances and similarities between Thomas the cat and me.
We share many characteristics and personalities. Tom certainly is not the best looking one, and can even be considered ugly. Though not as exaggerated, I have similar big ears and yellowish eyes. Constantly hindered by his poor physical attributes, Tom is ever the conspicuous gentle-cat in flirtations with his female counterparts. He makes the most of his charm. Likewise, I would never be considered the handsomest or the friendliest, but I find my way around supportive and compassionate friends. Never a truly talented athlete, I have become a more-than-satisfactory baseball player starring in the little league all star team. Although Im shorter than most players on a volleyball court, I manage to play bigger than what my physical statue allows. I become a contributing member for my team through steady improvement gained by staying after practices each time. It was due to sheer will and determination that I was able to compete at the end of my junior season even though I suffered a severe ankle injury. Tom displays the determination required to capture Jerry. Usually the loser in each epic battle, Tom continues his never-ending pursuit to catch Jerry time after time, defeat after defeat and injury after injury. Like Tom in the cartoon, determination and hard work helped me overcome adversities and succeed as a good friend and as an athlete.
Tom sets the example for persistency. He endured countless physical punishments, from being booted out of the house to being tortured by Spike, and maintained his pursuit. I am similar to Tom in this aspect; I will seize a beneficial opportunity and never let go. The school districts outstanding music program provided me with something I can hold on for my whole life. The countless hours spent over surmounting difficult technicalities taught me the persistency I needed to be successful. As a fourth grader, I was encouraged to begin playing the violin and was provided with weekly instructions. I seized this special opportunity and became a decent violinist. In every episode of Tom & Jerry, Tom would jump on every chance he has to regain self esteem in attempting to catch the ultimate prize. Through his persistent nature and countless failures, he learned to enjoy his few and far apart victories when he does catch Jerry. I remain importunate and dedicated in playing the violin despite innumerable hours of tedious practice. I value my musicianship that gave me a tool to express myself through music and the persistency to continue at the worst of times. As mirrored in the cartoon, rewards are often worth the wait even if they are few and far in between.
As I gathered my thoughts on this crazy dream, I found it so true in reflecting myself with Tom. He is a complete mirror image of me in a fantasy world. My determination and persistency are surely characteristics that will benefit me and everyone around me. I find that having characteristics like Toms will serve me well as I continue my journey in life.</p>
<p>i seriously think is a BAD idea to post your essay. </p>
<p>and just by skimming, it seems interesting</p>