Essay Idea for CommonApp Prompt

College Essays
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<p>Okay, I know the new prompts for the application. My favorite so far is "Describe a place where you are content." What I'm thinking for this essay is very cheesy and sentimental. It will be hard for me to write as I do not like either of those characteristics! However, my sophomore year I had a $45,000 dollar wreck that totaled one car and nearly demolished mine as well. I have never even so terrified in my life. Nobody was hurt and no hard feelings arose, but, as a young driver and precocious learner, I could see many scenarios of the future unravel before me! And none of them were good. The repercussions threw me for a loop! Anyway, my perfectly content place is my mother's arms. She embraced me for a good five minutes when I first saw her. I can only place that emotion I felt as relief! The wreck not only change my driving habits into more cautious and aware ones. I felt the guilt of a remorseful murderer. I didn't kill anyone, but I could have! The perspective I gained from this came from my parents. They told me not to worry. Nobody was hurt and you just have to move on. So, I did. Overall, it put to bed my overly careful life style and brought about a more abundant way of living. Happier and fuller. The moments in my mom's arms were what I tie this change to! Not only did she comfort me, but she improved my life more so than she already had. </p>

<p>I want to write about this. It is a good part of who I am. Of course I will emphasize the minutes in the embrace. I wanted you as a reader to just get the gist of the essay. This is by no means at all what it will look like. </p>

<p>Suggestions? Improvements?</p>

<p>Thanks for your time!</p>

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<p>it’s unique enough…but something about it seems off to me, you’ll just have to write the essay and see</p>

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<p>There’s something about this that’s just a little… odd. You make it sound like your mother has only ever hugged you once, and that one hug ended up changing your life forever. I think this will really depend on how you end up writing it. Be careful not to come off as too dependent or clingy.</p>

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<p>The whole point of this essay is to reveal your college strengths. College-relevant strengths. I have to say, many kids who write about mom or grandpa or little sibling, end up showing, sometimes even flat out stating, that they really need to be near home.</p>

<p>Start by thinking about what it is you want to show adcoms. This isn’t just a random essay about something meaningful. Then see how you can “show not tell” through the essay you craft.</p>

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<p>I agree with the above posters. I would scrap the whole in mom’s arms part. I’m afraid it will come off childish and, for lack of a better word, weird. </p>

<p>This sounds way more fitting for the last prompt about transitioning from childhood to adulthood. You can use similar reflection, but more focus on your growth and what this wake up call directly taught you, rather than taking away that mommy can fix everything.</p>