<p>I just started thinking about my common app essay. I'm really passionate about coaching basketball. Do you think it's a good idea to connect coaching basketball as a metaphor for college admission? thank you i really need some feedback</p>
<p>bump</p>
<p>feedback anyone?</p>
<p>huh? you're writing your essay on college admissions?
hmph</p>
<p>its basically an essay about how coaching basketball is related to getting into a college (years of preparation, the patience required, etc.)</p>
<p>i think its a great idea.. besides and(this might be cliche but...) if u feel passionate about something write about it and u'll write well..</p>
<p>I think the main thing is to communicate your passion for coaching basketball and to help us understand more about what makes you tick. Given that you have limited space, I wouldn't devote much time to the metaphor of relating it to the college admission process. After all, we all know preparing for college requires years of preparation and patience.</p>
<p>What we don't know is why you love coaching basketball. Tell us about your passion. How do you work with others? How do you respond to setbacks, losing a game? How do you work with a player that is not performing? What have you learned from your coaching experience- has it changed you in anyway? Can you describe a particular incident from your life that illustrates something important about you that we should know? How did you become involved in this? What is your team like? How does this fit with your plans for the future? </p>
<p>Try to make the coaching come alive- the adrenaline of watching someone you've coached make a shot, or the tough decision of pulling a player who isn't performing- give us adjectives and details. Tell us an interesting story that really helps us understand what it is like to walk in your shoes.</p>
<p>To elaborate further on your idea for the metaphor- I think it is okay to wrap up your piece explaining how your basketball coaching experience has taught you skills you'll use in the broader world...</p>
<p>I agree w/ Westchestermom. It would be OK to insert a couple of comparisons to college admissions. I would also like to read more about your coaching experiences, why you keep doing it and some of your memorable moments and players. I don't think that a straight compare/contrast essay would be as interesting.</p>
<p>amazing westchestermom.. thats a brilliant piece of advise..</p>