<p>i'm having a bit of trouble on my common app essay and i'd like some help. </p>
<p>my first essay focuses on my mother's ability to overcome tragedy (such as my dad leaving us) and has then helped me grow into a more independent person. would it be cliche to add how i have learned from that and moved onto a mission trip with my church where we help children who have also had family problems and whatnot... i'm asian and since many asians around my area go on mission trips, it's common to find that they write about them as well.</p>
<p>a different idea is how i have worked hard to succeed in my favorite sport. i started sophomore year, a huge handicap considering other girls had a year to hone their skills... i would go on and explain how i played on all different levels and now i am captain of the team.</p>
<p>i'd really like some comments back. thanks.</p>