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<p>how is my intrO?
In its mission statement, the UIC Honors College is described as a community of scholars whose goal is to enrich the educational experience of undergraduates and allow faculty and students of all disciplines to interact in teaching, learning, and research. What scholarly attributes do you bring to this community?
In the beginning of my academic career in high school, I came as a young student expected to find all the solutions to my questions. Rather, high school turned out to be the start of a journey in which my questions turned into more inquiries. As I took this challenge to seek out answers from year to year, I began to find out that education is not a subject that can be over with as soon as possible; instead it is voyage that one must figure out throughout his lifetime. Through my curiosity, vision, and my thirst for challenges I bring, I hope to be among a community of scholars and faculty that are proven to be determined individuals. </p>

<p>thanks :)</p>

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<p>ANYONE??? please just a good or this sucks?</p>

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<p>Good advice on college essays:</p>

<p>U.Va</a>. Office of Admission Essays</p>

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<p>going sentence by sentence</p>

<p>changed "expected" to expecting. dont use the phrase "turned into". you refer to "this challenge", by using "this" makes it sound like youve already refered to it, but u do so in the later part of the sentence (your previous sentence is about finding more questions, not the quest for answers). dont use "find out". next sentence sounds very cliche, its not the end, its the journey kinda thing.</p>

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<p>It's good. Listen to the previous poster. Also, try to be more specific, unless there is a maximum word limit less than 100 words.</p>