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<p>I have a essay, and it'd be awesome if someone could revise it. feel free to add in things you think needed, correct mistakes and grammar. Thank you! :)
Here is the prompt:
How has your family history, culture, or environment influenced who you are?</p>

<p>Here is my response:
Life is just one big learning experience. Everyone is constantly learning, all day every day. Almost everyone you meet in life has some type of influence on who you are as a person. Your family is basically the number one contributor to who you become in life. My family has had both good and bad influences on me, but whose family is perfect anyways. </p>

<pre><code>When you are around people who are supportive of whatever you do, it really helps you feel better about things. Its like you have your own little group of personal cheerleaders. As most can see, when football players, or basketball players have cheerleaders their confidence is boosted because they are constantly being rooted on during the game, its basically the same thing when you have a very supportive family. So my family being so supportive of me has really influenced me to believe in myself and always think I can succeed in whatever I do. My mom, is one of the most positive people I have ever met, she is a saint in my eyes. She has influenced me in many ways, but the most is being positive, I'm always trying to find as bright side to every situation.

Say you were brought up in a so called ‘bad’ household, parents who didn't care about you, no one to help you decipher between right and wrong, or just a parent that was never home, your perception on life could go one of two ways. One, you wanna be different, succeed, have kids and be nothing like your parents..or two, not care about your education, and not care about yourself being anything. In the end that would be your choice, but living in the environment will influence you to be how you want to be no matter what. My house was and has always been crazy, loud and a lot going on at all times. Some of my family from New York, is loud, obnoxious, don't really care about much, money hungry and rude. I don’t want to be anything like that. therefore I have become someone who is composed, respectful, and hard working. My family that I live with now, is hard working, respectful, honest and loving, the traits that they posses have helped me round myself as a person.

My whole life, I have been around adults. Ive always bonded with people older than me than people my age or younger. Having been around the older crowds my whole life has made me different than I would have been, if I have hung out with people my age or younger all the time. I am a more mature and reliable then most people my age. Yeah, we all go through the immature phases, but I'm done and over with that and ready to focus on the things in life that are important. I have my priorities set in stone and I'm going to accomplish them.
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<p>My family has molded me in many ways without even knowing it. Having both positive and negative effects on me, I'm glad my family is who they are because without them I wouldn't be who I am today. Seeing how everyone has turn out to be in the end, has made me want to work hard at everything I do and give my all to anything I do. My family has made me know who I will strive to be in the future.</p>

<p>I’m confused. You are not living with your family now? Make that clear. </p>

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<li>Forget the generalities. Don’t pontificatie about life, or different kinds of families. This is specifically about you and your family. Show don’t tell them what your feelings are about your family.<br></li>
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<p>This is you, and it’s a fabulous premise:

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<p>Without knowing exactly your situation, I would say this:. Make clear who your new role models are and how you are different than this.</p>

<p>Good luck</p>

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