Essay Readers where are you?

<p>So i am in my senior year and created this essay at the end of last year for one of my english classes. I took this essay as serious as possible in hopes of using it as my common app essay for this year. </p>

<p>So a little background about me and my main topic for my essay; I was born and raised in the Philippines until about the age of 7 and than came to the US. Everything may seem "normal" but prior to moving a lot has happened. At the age of 2 my father past (My original thought was writing an paper on living without a father but i found that to be a bit over done). After my father's death my mother moved to the US, keep in mind that I'm still 3-4. I was left with my aunt who took care of me until i moved to the US with my mom.</p>

<p>I decided to write about my separation with mother in the end. I talked about the plane flight to the US in the introduction but it somehow transformed into the plane flight metaphorically representing me leaving my culture and language and forgetting about my heritage/family as I adjusted to the US. </p>

<p>I felt that I somehow lost the original motive of my paper and couldn't find a way to wrap it up and to leave the essay reader with something to think about. Any ideas?</p>

<p>I would love help! Just let me know and I'll PM u my draft.</p>