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<p>Hi, I know that for the common app, the more unique your essay the better. I feel that my topic is pretty unique but i want it to be superb as i'm planning on applying to some very selective schools.</p>

<p>I have had juvenile diabetes since i was 3 and got diagnosed during my freshmen year with rheumatoid arthritis. This put a damper on my athletics and it was a very challenging time and i am still faced with challenges involving these diseases everyday. However, i dont want it to sound like a pity party. I was hoping to be able to twist these experience into roadblocks that have made me a stronger person. I am now much more compassionate and understanding towards people, because you never know what's really going on in other's lives, as well as more knowledgeable about medicine in general. I also volunteer at the JDRF regularly and once in the airport saved an old nun's life who couldn't speak english. She was a diabetic and i used my supplies etc to bring her back to consciousness.</p>

<p>-my problems with this is that i feel it may run on to be really long, should i include all of this information? also, i REALLY don't want it to sound like a pity party, but i think it has potential. any suggestions would be MUCH appreciated!</p>

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<p>Type 1 diabetes runs in our family (my sister and one of my children) so I understand what you’ve been through and what you have to do </p>

<p>Still, anytime you write about a disease, you have to walk a fine line. With that said, what really caught my eye in your post was when you mentioned saving the nun’s life. This is truly unique and was an event that was only made possible because of your own experience with diabetes. Also, it might be a good idea to include other reasons as well, (some of which you mentioned), such as being compassionate and observant, and your willingness to step up to the plate to help other people when it really counts. It sounds like there are additional details about this experience that could make a very compelling essay.</p>

<p>Good luck!</p>

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<p>thank you!</p>