Question for readers. I was hoping to do an essay on the basis of diversity and how I have been sheltered from it and how it has made me more open-minded and more open to new ideas unlike my community. Please give feedback on this topic.
I’m not sure that makes sense on a number of levels.
How has being “sheltered” from diversity made you more open minded than the others in your community who have been equally sheltered? And I cringe at the idea that being sheltered from diversity is a good thing-- it smacks of “Thank goodness we don’t have to deal with THEM”-- whoever “them” might be.
No, of course that’s not what you meant, but it was my first reaction. So if you’re going to use this, you’re going to have to tread carefully.
Then again, I’m not sure just how sheltered a typical American kid of your generation can really be. Social media is at your fingertips. You’re the least sheltered generation in history when it comes to people of different races, religions and ideologies.
I have went out of my way to become emerged in camps and opportunities that have allowed my growth of being open-minded and open to the all cultures, races, and religions. Although you think you know me, as you assumed, you do not. I have went out of my way to become open to all ideologies unlike my small, rural community. A very low percentage of people from my community have been open to new ideas, unlike myself. I want to write my essay to show I am a strong candidate for this university because of the experiences I have had.
Whoa…deep breaths.
I don’t know you. Neither does the ad com. I reached ed to your proposed topic as a stranger who doesn’t know you.
Take my advice or don’t take it…it makes no difference to me.